This service is for screenwriters who want detailed feedback on their screenplay, whether it be an original pilot, TV spec script, short film, or feature-length script. I will provide a logline and 3-5 pages of feedback and suggestions regarding the following topics:
Character: Is your protagonist intriguing enough for a reader to want to follow them on their journey? Are there too many characters and some should be combined into one person? Is your protagonist missing an arc? Are your characters multi-dimensional?
Pacing: Does your first act go on too long? Are you missing a middle act? Does the story end abruptly?
Story: Is the story compelling? Is the script a page-turner? Is there enough conflict? Is the character’s goal interesting? Is the story original, or has this idea been done before?
Tone: Does your tone match your subject matter? Are you inserting too many jokes into your historical drama script? Is your slice-of-life dramedy too over-the-top? Is your action movie coming off as a gritty drama? Is your comedy script actually funny?
Dialogue: Is the dialogue too clever by half? Do your characters have their own distinguishable voice? Does the dialogue naturally or awkwardly reveal plot and exposition?
Format: Is the script written in professional screenplay format? Is your TV spec script formatted in the same style as the series’ scripts? Are sluglines clear and written correctly? Are character names capitalized when they are first introduced?