Justin Hays, LAc
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Feb 13, 2013
I have released the funds. However the book was rather non-cohesive in terms of organization. For instance the medical theory section is really a bit weak, and contains a lot of info that has nothing to do with medical theory. I just deleted several paragraphs. Several points are repeated throughout the essay, as though there was a real challenge to decide what to write. I think you should have organized your thoughts better before beginning to write.
Also the english is lacking in grammar and style. Don't get me wrong you have excellent english - for a second language - and I can usually understand what you mean pretty well. But stylistically I need something that reads like a newspaper or a book you'd pick off the shelf here in North America. Maybe some of it is british accent stuff but it reads strangely at times and doesn't flow for more than a paragraph at a time.
I will spend probably about 5 hours editing and it will be okay, but it is still poorly organized over all. I am only just starting the editing process, but I feel that about 10% of the work will probably be deleted due to repeating your points and obviously just filling space. I could not repeat with you, but you did fulfill about 90% of the minimum requirements so I have released the funds.
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